Wednesday, October 28, 2009

Paper Problem

So far the biggest issue I'm having with my paper is connecting my sources with my thesis and overall premise. For example, my source from Forbes.com highlights the attributes of a 'workaholic', and discusses its recent growth in our society. In my paper, I'm trying to connect this trend in our society to the way Buffy balances her work (vampire slaying) from her private life. I my paper, I connect these two thoughts by stating:
"While Buffy seems to stay cool under the pressure, she does have her moments of, as Robinson describes it, "not being there" when away from the job. Robinson warns that when one connects their personal life to their work, an unbalanced relationship likely exists. Buffy could be the poster girl for these symptoms, as she often relates her school life to slaying, and is notorious for dazing off and imagining things."

Although I think the source contributes to the paper, I sort of feel like it's not really connecting to my subject (Buffy) as well as it could. Any tips as to how I could relate these two concepts more seamlessly would be greatly appreciated!

5 comments:

  1. You can compare how she has matured from this girl to a mature woman. This will show how she has already balanced her life before and after she became a slayer.

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  2. I think you might want to try to find different sources. If they don't support your thesis then the only reason to include them is to tear apart their analysis.

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  3. If the source doesn't correctly connect, then make it directly connect by explaining it in a different way.

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  4. I think integrating sources is difficult, just keep trying to find the parallels between your source and Buffy. Find each way your source supports your arguement.

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  5. Mabe you can give an example from the show of how she's overworked and can't make clear decisions, like if she accidentily let a vampire go when she was supposed to kil them. Or even connect the "dozing off and imagining things" part to "Hush" and how she was dreaming about Riley while in class.

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